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He called me pretty boy when I first came here. Now he calls me trash, if he calls me anything at all.

"Hey trash, pick this up for me."

It didn't even start out as a joke, as if he'd been saying it all along. It didn't bustle merrily across stage, as if it had been sitting in the wings, waiting for its inevitable appearance. It was thrown, like a heckler's open disdain.

Pretty boy became someone else, belonged to someone else.

What was I supposed to think of that? Some bastard boy with more hair on his legs than his face was the same bastard boy I had once been to someone else, when I'd first appeared on the scene.

I had tried to ignore the signs; he had seen them, and acted swiftly.

Just like I'd been tender, and the first pain had been tender, here was an ache that carried still that tenderness - it was a killing ache, but one devoid of love as the ones before it had not been.

Now here in my place was another soft, sweet tender ache for him. The hardening that could only happen was not the one I wanted; my heart was not an organ I wanted firm, thickened, spilled, but handled - yes, oh please -

But now, having once let him in by the hairs on my chin(ny chin chin), I had grown a pelt that caressed me in his stead. No longer was I pork, but only potential predator. Possible competition. No longer prey, but another big bad wolf.

"Trash-"

And here I look up at him, but I daren't speak; how can I when it is with a voice that neither of us care for? He has placed a suitcase down, and nudges it with his foot.

"Pick it up," he says. What can I say about his voice that isn't different from his face? He is ice, as far as I am concerned.

"It's got your stuff in it."

"It's been a long time," I attempt. My voice splits between syllables.

He catches my eyes: if he has a soul it is kept behind eyes that are made of frosted window-panes.

Ironically, he holds his arms open. I go toward him with brief hesitation, and he folds me into him.

"You're just my height now," he whispers.

"Just your height," I repeat. It is a stabbing thought as I realise that this is never what he wanted - no amount of hugging, kissing or sentiment can make me worth anything to him now. I am glad he had the best years of my life; it is right that at least one of us had them.

His grip suddenly becomes tight and constrictive. It isn't anything new, but it's not something I had expected now. He growls into the cup of my ear: "Remember, even now, if you ever tell anyone - not that anyone would believe you - you're dead."

Then he's soft again, and smiling, and I am released from him. He taps the waiting case with his foot again, and only when I've picked it up and turned to the door do I hear his - retreating isn't the right word; receding would be more apt - footsteps as he goes back upstairs. I don't think to what - to whom. All I can comprehend is that it is innocence he is interested in, and the age that encompasses it; what does flesh mean to someone who steals entire lives whole?

But it's what I have left. Flesh. Flesh and little else.

I hear a squeal as I close the door, but I know later there'll be screams.
There is no satisfying closing line for a deviation such as this.

EDIT: Holy fuck, a deviation. Holy God. Goddamn. A DD. Bloody Hell. Thank you thank you thank you to :iconxlntwtch: for suggesting and :iconneurotype: for featuring, and a big thank you to all who favourite and comment (I'll be sure to try and give a llama to all who favourite, and to respond to all who comment! <3).

2nd EDIT:: I do read all comments, but all of my replies (for most of my deviations) tend to be along the lines of 'my (many) thanks... etc' and I feel a bit of a cop-out if it just seems if I'm saying the same thing to everyone; but please be assured that I read all of them, and I am grateful (gushingly grateful) to every single one, and to every person!
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-02-14
Wolf Hide by *Psyghostis ( Suggested by xlntwtch and Featured by neurotype )
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Critique by Forgotten-Heir Jan 17, 2013, 2:28:16 AM
Wow, I can't even find anything negative to say on the subject; not that I'd want to, but as this is a critique I feel I should give the good and bad.
But this is honestly a perfect piece, you masterfully wrote this and drove the emotion straight from the characters heart into the readers and you have without a doubt made this a most memorable piece that'll be hard to out do, but I bet you are up to the challenge!
My only complaint is that there is not more to read, but no ... it is at the same time perfect with the little that is here, because it leaves so much open to the imagination and that alone is amazing. <3
What do you think?
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16 out of 18 deviants thought this was fair.

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Critique by mastodon-96 Jan 27, 2013, 12:14:36 PM
A very powerful piece. Somewhat of a "taboo" subject outside narrow niches of interest, but you have breached it with intellect and strength of character, confronting every issue within the boundaries of the plot and ensuring that nothing is left untouched.

The bad must come with the good, though, for without it we cannot grow as artists. In its simplest form, my only criticism is that your piece is too wordy. Your phrasing and syntax is imaginative, but you delve too deeply into structure - taking too many words to suggest ideas that would only need a singe clause to bring across.

Aside from that one criticism, your work is a fantastic read. Your figures of speech are appropriate and creative, your vision and flair pushing beyond the parameters of mediocrity into the realms of true art.

Keep it up! ^^
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:icondonkey-hotty:
Donkey-Hotty Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
One more favorite wouldn't hurt, amirite? *faves*
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh good deity, no! Definitely not. And my many thanks for all of them. :D
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderfully disturbing. The thought of the victim knowing that he has been victimized and still being so attached....It's horrible. And perfect. I love it.

A very well-deserved DD. :heart:
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've got quite an infatuation with Stockholm Syndrome and the psyche of the people who are affected; do they ever feel trapped, do you think, or does it feel just the same as love does? I think it's due to my internal feelings of helpless devotion, or rather, of being so devoted that you enjoy being that helpless toward another person, or people. It's either a grand statement of trust, or of complete foolishness, perhaps.

In this case, I think the attachment is a coping device; if the protagonist has convinced himself that he loves his abuser, than he can probably tell himself that he allowed himself to be (ab)used, and keep a sense of false control. Then again, if (and I might write a sequel to this, as it were) he discovers that, abuse or not, he really did love his abuser, I wonder how he'd deal with that in turn.

Thank you for the great comment. <3
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You played that out very well. I don't know that I've ever given much thought to Stockholm Syndrome myself, but you've portrayed it exactly as I might imagine it. I would love to see a sequel. :)
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Aurora9912 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Powerful.
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013   Writer
:iconcongratsddplz: ... I just love this piece.
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:iconkelevren:
kelevren Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
love it!
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
I enjoyed how this provides just a hair's width too little information to figure it all out. I have answers I find satisfactory to the questions it raises, but they're probably not other people's answers.

Also, rough. And your last line is more solid than you think.
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I'd be very happy if you could share your answers, either through note (if you don't want other people to see) or comment. And if you think they're different from other people's, then that's certainly all the better.

Thank you for the great comment. :)
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:icontriptychforinnocence:
TriptychForInnocence Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Stunned - being an understatement.
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm flattered (and, of course, very proud) that my writing can have such an effect. Thank you. <3
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TriptychForInnocence Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are warmly welcome; and thank you for the :llama:
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003145 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Deep
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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:iconwildzyria:
WildZyria Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The guy's last words to the narrator... lawl! :iconclapplz:

This piece is frankly awesome. One of those readings that get your mind working on it. And the last line! You couldn't have ended it better! Despite the sad, self-loathing (I thought) tone, the last line made me laugh. Out loud. It's wonderfully subtle and not subtle! :heart:
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!

At first I was thinking about not putting this up at all, due to the theme of it (it's obviously there, through the subtlety and, as you put it, self-loathing of the main character), but I'm very glad I did; both for the DD and the reception it's received. It's definitely my most risque-est piece.

<3
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:iconwildzyria:
WildZyria Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Risque always delights people, in good ways and strange ways. I'm also very glad you put it up. :D

Now I should go and some of your less daring works.
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VicerineOfAngels Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Student Writer
Amazing! A very strong piece of prose. I'm glad I saw this on the DD page, and it definitely deserves it, congrats :D
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Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My many thanks, and I'm quite it has the impact I intended. :D
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DarthDovahkin Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Bah, this Is really good. I'm happy you got DD, you deserved It!
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Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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DarthDovahkin Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Student Digital Artist
You're welcome. ^-^
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:iconjamminjo:
JamminJo Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Sensational work of art :love:

Congratulations on your DD :)
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D It's greatly appreciated.
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:iconjamminjo:
JamminJo Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
You are very welcome :)
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ValiantShadow Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Student General Artist
This is breathtaking. Rarely do I comment on DDs, but this one I could not simply allow to slip by.

The words hold a hard, cold truth that so many people go through, which gives this piece layers of depth. The analogy, turning from harmless pig to wolf that could blow down all the second character's defenses was cleverly used, poignant, and it tied into the title. Just awesome.
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Bonnie-Lizzie Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I have to admit, this is the only literary DD that I've ever bothered reading. This truly intrigued me, friend :3

Congratulations on the Daily Deviation; You deserve it : P
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Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Good god, considering how many there must have been in a year (albeit that literature is quite underrated on here) of your being here, that's quite an honour. My thanks indeed! :D
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Bonnie-Lizzie Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No problem, bro : P
:iconpewdiebrofistplz:
I look forward to seeing more from you x3 Hope you get some more DD'S XD
Have an awesome day, bro~ : D
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You and me, both. xD Damn that silly once-every-six-months rule...

You have a great day, too. :D
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:iconbonnie-lizzie:
Bonnie-Lizzie Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ha ha, you can only get DD's every six months? That's like the dentist... but worse :V

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Psyghostis Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't think I've been to the dentist since I had a lot of orthodontic work done when I was 10, except for one time I had to have a tooth taken out (though I really don't see why it couldn't have just been left to get loose and fall out).
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Many thanks! :D :hug:
I cannot think of how this day could be nicer! Aha! <3 You have a great day, too!
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure, thank you :happybounce:
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:iconneurotype:
neurotype Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is one fucked up relationship.

I love it. Trying to fill in the blanks is an adventure. :salute:
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Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A very fucked (up) relationship, indeed.

Thank you, and thank you so much for featuring this! <3 I just about died when I saw someone else congratulate me on getting a DD - at first I thought they meant DLD, and then I looked and I've been spazzing out for the last ten or so minutes. I'm sitting here looking quite shell-shocked, I imagine. But really, thank you so much.

Well, I'd certainly be interested in hearing what you come up with for the blanks. :D
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neurotype Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle:

Tragically not that exciting, there's drugs and high school dropouts. I Occam's Razor everything.
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Psyghostis Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm pretty sure I used to Occam's Razor answers in tests I wasn't certain of, in college. xD
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neurotype Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle: sounds good to me.
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:iconaldwarke:
aldwarke Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
Sounds like a nice guy. Congratulations on the feature.
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Psyghostis Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
He must be quite a charmer, though, I imagine, many are to the vulnerable.

Many thanks. :)
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:iconglossolalias:
glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
your work has been featured here: [link] please go check out the other pieces & have a nice day :heart:
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:iconpsyghostis:
Psyghostis Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Many thanks for the feature! :D I apologise for not replying sooner, as I've been away on holiday.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
not a problem!
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013
very well done.
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FairyQeen Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013
I second :iconforgotten-heir:'s comment. A DD is very much in order here! :worship: :heart:
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